Holly&Fred

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Very true. I am getting better, which is good except for the fact it leaves me much less Adam Lambert-Obsessing and writing time. I think I should only be missing the second factor in that, but sadly, that is not the case. Adam Lambert is my guilty pleasure.
Hehe. Anyways *focuses*, the story is hitting some speed bumps! I can't get into the character's head, and I've found he needs to experience unconditional love. Which is hard, considering I've made him a rather heartless person.

I will. I'm currently sick (as is everyone and their brother), so I have way to much time on my hands, meaning the story is coming along nicely. *muses* I've spent far to much time obsessing over Adam Lambert.... But thats another topic entirely.
Anyways, thanks for the feedback, its been surprisingly helpful.

*continued*
He chooses Russian Roulette, because they won't tell him WHO they will kill, simply that they WILL kill someone. Once the gun lands on him, and he pulls the trigger, he has a vision of heaven, with his brother. Yet it never simply states he dies, and the visions can either be triggered by what will happen or what he simply is terrified of happening.... So you never really know for sure.
Sound okay? *needs feedback*

Thanks for commenting on my story/blog post thing! I changed the story more since the post, just as I've been writing it.
The beginning is the same (opens with the vision, game, ect.) However afterwards, he receives a phone call saying his older brother has been shot and killed. *Just as some character background, he grew up on the streets, with the older brother, they joined a gang at fifteen and had been very close throughout their whole lives.
In revenge, the main character (Damien), goes off on a hunt to find the guy who killed his brother. At first, its just him and the guy he's tracking (his visions keep him up to date). The guy who he is tracking, however, also belongs to a gang (rival one) and eventually they find out Damien is tracking this other guy, so they come after him and capture him. Then he's given a choice-play Russian Roulette and possibly die (or live), or he can be released without harm, but they can kill one person who he knows and loves.