Sneak Peak of my Novel

[wickedrodent]

I've been asked to be more active here, and I really do miss a lot of the people whom I used to know.. I've actually already posted this somewhere else, on another site, but thought I'd ask for opinions here as well. (=

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So.. after taking a VERY long shower, I went onto my computer and realized it had been two months since I wrote anything at all for my book.

I was mad at myself for letting it die. It felt like I had given up on it. So I decided I would sit down and write something. So I did.

I wrote an entire chapter, in fact.

Then my muse died.

I need Emerald to come back, but she has wandered off to unknown lands. [Yes, her name is Emerald..]

So I've decided I will give a quote from my novel. Hopefully some positive feedback will bring Emerald back around?

I think the reason for the block has something to do with me wondering if it would even get published if I do finish it, and wondering if anyone would even buy it. So.. yeah. :/

Please note that I haven't edited it. At all. It's VERY rough.

And also note: If you steal any part of this, you will be hunted down by Emerald and trust me, you do not want that.

Poppy had lost it. Every inch of her body recoiled as the news sunk in. In the background of her thought, she could hear the sound of Daniel talking, explaining, but none of the words sunk in. She was gone, her mind lost in a scatter. It was too much for her to handle. She felt Daniel's hand brush against her skin but she pushed herself out of the bed and over to the door, her pounding head lost in the tussle with the rest of her thoughts and emotions. She heard him get up and walk over but she shook her head, her hair coming loose from the ponytail.

"I need to take a walk."

He opened his mouth and she shook her head again and reached for the doorknob.

"Alone."

The hurt was evident in his face, but her brain didn't register it. She walked out the open doorway, her hand sliding down the wooden rail as her feet hit each step with a slight echo. The air was full of moisture, as if the tears she had been crying were banning together to remind her how bad she felt. The moon was full above, bright and taunting. As soon as she felt the grass beneath her bare feet she started running. The tears fell down her cheeks steady with the rhythm of the "thump, thump" of her feet as they hit the hard ground. Her eyes registered the lake in the distance, the salty smell filling her nostrils, but her feet carried on, not willing to give up her freedom. She felt in control for the first time in a long time. The feeling of the world rushing by, not being tied to anything. If she wished it, she could keep running and never look back. As long as she was running, she wouldn't have to think about anything. As long as she was running, she was ok.

The problem with that scenario was that she was coming to a lake, a very wide lake. And yet, her strides did not falter. Her feet hit the ground for the last time before catapulting into the lake with a giant splash. The water gave way and she plunged under, her body falling into the darkness. Her eyes were forced open, the stinging salt mixed into the water doing it"s best to force them closed again but she rejected the urge. At the same time, she swam downward, deeper and deeper into the darkness. She felt safe, although it contradicted every survival signal her body was sending out.

She gained control of her rational thoughts just as her oxygen was starting to run out. Her arms stopped moving, her head snapping up to look for the light. She was so far down, the moon was but a distant shimmer. Her clothes weighed her down, making her panic for a brief moment before she remembered to move her arms and kick her feet. She took in half a mouthful of water as she spun in the lake, her arms propelling her only by inches toward the light. And then the light from the moon faded, the darkness closing in on her.

[Rnd210]

Is it going to be a romance novel, if so why not bring her back by a bold rescue of some sort, such as a handsome by stander jumps in and pulls her out of the water or the man that she had been upset with or fought with rescue her.

If it would get published, I would diffenately read it! What I have read so far makes the book sound like it is going to be really good.

[wickedrodent]

I actually have that scene already completed. Heh.

The book is part romance, but it is a fantasy first and foremost.

It's not so much a lack of good plotting. I know what's going to happen, I'm just lacking the stamina to actually write it down. :/

Thanks for your input, though!

[Rnd210]

So does that mean that maybe instead of her actually being rescued that maybe she finds a new hidden place that has weird creatures, basically something similar to like the Chronicals of Narnia or possibly Harry Potter. Keep writing, you've got me wanting to know more about the book. Finnish it so I can buy it and read it!

[wickedrodent]

That's the wrong track. xD

Yup, you've definitely inspired me to write. I'm going to aim for another 1,000 words when I get home from work tonight.

[Amsley246]

Looks good to me! It kept my interest while I was reading it and I actually want to read more , but I guess I'll have to buy it! Hopefully all goes well and I wish you the very best! Who knows, maybe it will be bigger then Twilight or Harry Potter!